Today , i would like to tell you about some of my experiences of travel and hobbies. I have travelled rather a lot places in my country .
I learned some things after i came back home. I knew their life how it is . I would like to go Nha Trang one more because it is very wonderful . I was so relaxed and happy when I went there. People is very kind and lovely . They are willing to help when i need them
I have a lot of hobbies. There are reading comic book , chatting with my friends , listening to piano music before i slept and talking about everything with my friends wherever but i like to listen to piano music the best . It's very airy .If i have free time , i'll study to play the piano.
I have studied in london for 6 years now and in july i'm going to vietnamese in order to visit my family.
Well done Shinie. You have written about some interesting experiences and tried to use this week’s grammar. Try putting some pictures into your blog to make it more interesting.
ReplyDeleteSome corrections:
“I have travelled rather a lot places in my country .”
‘travel’ takes the preposition ‘to’ before the object.
Also, when you give the quantity of a noun we use ‘a lot of’
‘I have travelled to rather a lot of places in my country.’
“I would like to go Nha Trang one more because it is very wonderful .”
You can use two expressions here. ‘one more time’ or ‘once more’.
‘I would like to go Nha Trang onc more time because it is very wonderful.’
“and in july i'm going to vietnamese in order to visit my family.”
‘Vietnamese’ is an adjective. The noun is ‘Vietnam’.
and in july i'm going to Vietnam in order to visit my family.