Friday, 20 November 2009
my home town
I birthed in Rian. That is a small city on Zhejiang in China. There have some beautiful scenery. Such as beaches. There have more and more seafood and there are many people who work for fishing. So you can eat a lot of fresh seafood. You can find many farm everywhere and breath more fresh air. And there don’t have any nightlife. You can enjoy a quiet night and a good sleeping. I think everyone live there are not happy the reason is there is so poor. Everyone only can have a full diner but can't have enough money to buy something if they want. And there is poor travel. If you want go to everywhere that isn't so far by your foot. If you want to go there for travel, I don't think it is a good idea.
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Thanks Ray! You have use the example to good effect. Try to add some pictures to make the text more interesting.
ReplyDeleteSome corrections:
“I birthed in Rian”
Good guess. Birth is the noun so you need to use the evrb here. In English, this is always passive.
‘to be’+’born’
‘I was born in Rian’
“There have more and more seafood and there are many people who work for fishing.”
Good idea to use ‘there’ at the start of the sentence, but always eith the verb ‘to be’
Also, ‘more and more’ is for increasing quantities.
‘There is a lot of seafood and there are many people who work in fishing.’
“There have some beautiful scenery. Such as beaches.”
Same problem here. Don’t use ‘have’ after ‘there’ use ‘is of are’. Also, when you use ‘such as’ it goes in the same sentence, not a new one.
‘There is some beautiful scenery such as the beaches.’