I come from China when I was 10 years old it is first my tourism they are a lot of place . I lived in wenzhou for quite a few years it's my hometown I love it and I spent a lot of months in yunnnan and one weak in Japan and something country
I love Tokyo beautiful it has alot of places to good and many things do .There are many different cooutry people it's nlce I like it but I would like to Disney world which is every big and many children because Disney is chilidren paradise and there are very quite .
I hate wenzhou city beacause in the road it is very crowded and noisy I don't like it is unheathly for me .it is very different and it is not safe and it is boring sometimes
Well done Patrick,
ReplyDeleteYou have done well on the blogging lessons this term and I think your writing has improved a lot.
“when I was 10 years old it is first my tourism”
With ‘when’ clauses have a comma before the subject of the next clause.
‘when I was 10 years old, I went travelling for the first time’
“I love Tokyo beautiful it has alot of places to good and many things do”
Here, the adjective ‘beautiful’ needs to go with the verb ‘to be’. It is also the reason why you love it so you can use ‘because’.
‘I love Tokyo because it is beautiful and has a lot of places to go and many things do.’
“I don't like it is unheathly for me .”
Again, here, you can use ‘because’.
‘I don't like it because it is unhealthy for me .’