Thursday, 19 November 2009

I have two places where I love it very much . First , It's Vietnam where I was born .There are a lot of sightseeing such as Nha Trang, Vung Tau , Da Lat, Hue, so on but I love Nha Trang the best because the beach is big and clean and it has seafood deliciously . Every year , Many people visit it . It's really a wonderful place .However , it's also has a little bad things about it . There are a few litter in the seaside . And second , this is London . It has lots of places to go and plenty of things to do. It's very beautiful and ancient but it's so cold . There are a lot of museums and famous views as Big Bang , London Eyes , National museum ,and Buckingham Place , ... I can find many things that I like here . There are a few problems with London . There is too much traffic when I want to go anywhere and there will be very dangerous at ningt if you are alone outside . I think you will be enjoy two places if you have free time to visit it.

1 comment:

  1. Well done shinie,

    You have used the example very well to write your own text. It would be nice to see some pictures of the place you mentioned.

    Some corrections:

    “There are a lot of sightseeing”

    Sightseeing is an uncountable noun so you could change the verb ‘to be’
    Or use a different ‘object’.

    ‘There is a lot of sightseeing’ or ‘There are a lot of sightseeing opportunities’

    “and it has seafood deliciously”

    Nice language but we generally use ‘adjective+noun’.

    ‘…and it has delicious seafood’


    “However, it's also has a little bad things about it.”

    ‘bad things’ is countable so we can’t use ‘a little’. Here, we use ‘a few’.

    ‘However , it's also has a few bad things about it’

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