My name is CHEN DONGKE it is my first go to London.I go to school in septemeber 8 and at 8 PM but I don' t mind I can by school's car .I look at a large numeber of students .But I think I 'm luckly beause my cousin and my sister and me in all going to school my cousin help with me carry in luggage .we were all very excited because I think about new school it is good
I look at a lots of trees in the both road and two lorry in my school this school tutor is very friendly .I can buy all kinds of jewwllery and clothes there then I'm hungry so with my cousin go to restaurtant I think it is delicious
I think London is fiancial center it is important city impact world
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Well done Patrick. It must be nice having family here to help you.
ReplyDeleteLook at your story again. Most of the verbs are in the present tense. Try using some past tenses when you talk about things which happened before now.
Look at this example from your story.
"My name is CHEN DONGKE it is my first go to London.I go to school in septemeber 8 and at 8 PM but I don' t mind I can by school's car .I look at a large numeber of students ."
"My name is CHEN DONGKE it is my first go to London.I arrived to school in septemeber 8 and at 8 PM but I didn't mind I came by school's car .I saw a large numeber of students ."
Look at the rest of your story. Can you change some more verbs to the past tense?