Wilbur Wright & Orville Wright were famous invents for the first airplane , this was very important invents of the world .
They were born in 1867 & 1871 in the Millville in Indianer and Dayton in Ohio , USA discriminably. In one day , their father being the new helicopter toy for they to play . when Wilbur Wright & Orville Wright get spoil the helicopter toy , than they try to make new helicopter toy and this behavior make they increase interest for airplane and fly .Wright brothers both went to high school , but cannot get the diploma .
In 1884 year , their family move into Dayton in Ohio from Richmond in Indianer suddenly , so Wilbur cannot get the diploma when finish during four year high school live .Orville was dropped out school in year 3 .In 1889 , Orville state built to has painting office , and Wilbur help to design and built .
After there year , the bike climate was very hit in USA , than they built the bike selling and repairing shop , purpose was gain the money for the investigate and to make are airplane..
During in 1896 , succession about the aviation news and touch Wright brothers hot-blooded heart , during in the investigate aviation process was very difficulties , they alway lose ,but they never give up .
In the 1899 year , they success made the frist airplane,and they tried to flied , althought they face to innumerable lose , bur they still never give up . in th 1904 year , they were can success to flied...and the airplane became the people very important vehicular of the world .
Well done Heath. Despite some errors, it is easy to read and understand. You have worked hard on your research, and this shows. You have also used your own English which is very important. Good work!
ReplyDeleteSome points to remember
“Wilbur Wright & Orville Wright were famous invents for the first airplane , this was very important invents of the world .”
‘Invent’ is the verb.
The person is an ‘inventor’ and the other noun is ‘invention’
Sometimes you forget to use the past tense.
“In 1884 year , their family move into Dayton in Ohio from Richmond in Indianer suddenly , so Wilbur cannot get the diploma when finish during four year high school live”
‘In 1884, their family moved to Dayton in Ohio from Richmond in Indiana suddenly , so Wilbur could not get the diploma when he finished after four years at high school.’
Sometimes you use too much grammar
“in th 1904 year , they were can success to flied”
You could use an adjective and a noun
‘In 1904, they had a successful in flight’
Or a verb and an adverb
‘In 1904 they flew successfully’