Thursday, 22 October 2009

Anne

Anne The story is about a .small girl whoes name is Anne. Anne haven't parents so she lives in orphanaga . One day .Mr.M comes to orphanage and wants a kid from there . He likes Anne, because she looks very lovely. But when they arrive home ,Mr. M doesn't like Anne , she wents a boy .so she tells Mr.M to send Anne back.Then Mr.M sends Anne to orphanage .On the road, Anne chatting with Mr.M about not having parents when she was a baby , but she really like Mr.M .Then Mr.M doesn't want to send Anne to orphanage and they come back home .Mr.M tells Mrs.M that tries to like Anne.because Anne is really poor. then they send Anne to school . Anne begins a happy life in Mr.M's family.
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  1. elpp2rainbow5 November 2009 at 08:00

    Thankyou for catching up with missed work Ivy. This will help with your final results. Well done.

    some errors:
    "The story is about a small girl who name is Anne"

    There are two ways to do this correctly:

    you can use 'whose'

    "The story is about a small girl whose name is Anne"


    After a preposition we use a verb with 'ing'

    "Anne chatting with Mr.M about she haven't parents when she was a baby ,"

    "Anne chatting with Mr.M about not having parents when she was a baby ,"


    or 'is called'

    "The story is about a small girl who is called Anne"

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