Monday, 26 October 2009
Famous people in my country
My country famous people is JiaChen-Li .Why he is famous he just very rich and Hong Kong rich peoples have a lots ? Because he was 16 year old he worked in the Hong Kong,He wasworking about 15 years, he start his business in the Hong Kong , When he start his business, he very hard working everyday and he never being lazy and he never scare invest rick. This just can say he is hard work and brave people .How can say he is famous ?Because JiaChen-Li and other rich people is diverse .When he has much money he didn't will save overall mony for himself he will donate to poor peoples and now he is most rich peoples in China and Hong Kong .So i thing my country famous is JiaChen-Li
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Thanks Calvin. Good choice of person. Try to include pictures and video in your blogs to make them more interesting.
ReplyDeleteAlso, remember each week the blogs should reflect the grammar from the other classes. Here, you need to use the ‘simple past’ more often.
For example:
“When he start his business, he very hard working everyday and he never being lazy and he never scare invest rick”
‘When he started his business, he worked very hard, everyday, and he was never lazy or scared to invest.’
Also when you use a ‘because’ you need to give a reason.
“Because he was 16 year old he worked in the Hong Kong,”
‘When’ is a better choice here.
‘When he was 16 year old he worked in the Hong Kong,’
Finally, use the spell checker in ‘Blogger’ you don’t need to make simple mistakes.
“mony”
‘….money’
“i thing my country famous”
‘I think….’